Gonzaga Haiku

[Doctor Hoop]

Gonzaga last seen
Beaten like a rented mule -
Once more, with feeling

 

[Samoo]

I'm on the west coast
Game will be at 7 for me
I'll get sleep tonight

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

I'm on the west coast
Game will be at 7 for me
I'll get sleep tonight

Act now! Change line two
Take away a syllable
While you can edit.

 

[Samoo]

Damn I was too late
Now my haiku is not true
Mojo gods, mercy

 

[FfldCntyFan]

Pacific time zone
Haiku is as haiku does
It's never too late

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Washington is a
Cool state though UConn prevail
In the end my friend

Gonzaga is weird
Catholic school on the west coast?
hippies here

Follow @Doctor Hoop
and @Tyler2Rings. They both
corrected errors.

Haiku two has an
ambiguity, and an
odd outright mistake

"Cath-o-lic" is three
"Cath-lic" is two. Hyphens help
produce clarity

Now, about line 3
Not sure what you were after
with just "hippies here."

And while you're at it,
In haiku one, "Prevail"
could become "prevails"

Champs are in town
After trashing these has beens,
Mark and make it smell

Add @Samoo to list
of those who make corrections
And add yourself too?

 

[bendm]

No rain? Surprising,
So make it rain on the zags,
A high scoring win.

 

[Ctedgeman]

Space needle dog fight
Bear our fangs, no bark all bite
Rip out their dang throats

 

[Umami Zen]

Danny always knew
Huskies never nine and two
Bummer for Mark Few.

 

[Connhomer99]

Follow @Doctor Hoop
and @Tyler2Rings. They both
corrected errors.

Haiku two has an
ambiguity, and an
odd outright mistake

"Cath-o-lic" is three
"Cath-lic" is two. Hyphens help
produce clarity

Now, about line 3
Not sure what you were after
with just "hippies here."

And while you're at it,
In haiku one, "Prevail"
could become "prevails"


Add @Samoo to list
of those who make corrections
And add yourself too?

My bad it didn’t let me write “Je.sus” before hippies And I didn’t realize Catholic was 3 syllables but ok hmmm

Go huskies!

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

My bad it didn’t let me write “Je.sus” before hippies And I didn’t realize Catholic was 3 syllables but ok hmmm

Go huskies!

Look over the thread
EV'RY post is haiku, or
At least it should be

This includes comments,
corrections, apologies,
and explanations

It's a discipline
It can seem persnickety
Stick with it; it's fun

We support the team
The coaches, players, and fans
We all pull the sled

 

[tower1]

No rain? Surprising,
So make it rain on the zags,
A high scoring win.

Clingan needs to get tougher. He is playing too soft .

 

[Connhomer99]

Look over the thread
EV'RY post is haiku, or
At least it should be

This includes comments,
corrections, apologies,
and explanations

It's a discipline
It can seem persnickety
Stick with it; it's fun

We support the team
The coaches, players, and fans
We all pull the sled

Sorry about that
I get it now it will not
Happen again win

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Clingan needs to get tougher. He is playing too soft .

He beats your haiku
In EV'RY possible way
Work on your own game

 

[Waquoit]

Syllable Questions?
Use howmanysyllables
Dot com for answers

 

[FfldCntyFan]

Nothing left to say
Other than this haiku thread
Really jumped the shark

 

[jayteeman]

Champs are in town
After trashing these has beens,
Mark and make it smell

Should have start with "The"
Must count with fingers to check
Pinky lied again