First Game Haiku

[Hans Sprungfeld]

I think your last one
haiku is wrong because it
7-7-6

I'm not seeing it
I'm not saying that you're wrong
Just not seeing it

Can you point it out?
So I can say, "I get it."
That'd be helpful

 

[hansonel-amin]

In it to win it
Playing through first night jitters
Respectable win

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Genuine problem
Edits aren't available
Soon after posting

Much more important
To count syllables this year
Before you hit Post

Write five, seven, five
Reread, counting syllables
Then, edit or post

 

[DALTX]

First game of season
I need to fiddle with apps
A Roku Haiku

 

[Husky Alien]

Wow, I still can't count
OK: 7-7-6
Counting is a bitch

I'm not seeing it
I'm not saying that you're wrong
Just not seeing it

Can you point it out?
So I can say, "I get it."
That'd be helpful

so your second line
I am only counting six right?
that is highlighted

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

so your second line
I am only counting six right?
that is highlighted

I'm counting seven
OK, sev-en sev-en, six
2. Plus 4. Plus 1.

As to your haiku
Line 2: Change "I am" to "I'm"
Or, get rid of "right"

Or maybe I'm wrong
Counting IS crazy-making
Plus, a new season!

 

[Husky Alien]

Ah now I see says
me you are good Hans okay
went over my head

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Ah now I see says
me you are good Hans okay
went over my head

Haiku's a team sport
And we are Boneyard teammates
Season has started

 

[Husky Alien]

felt good to watch UConn
basketball tonight and crowd
we are young and tough

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

felt good to watch UConn
basketball tonight and crowd
we are young and tough

That pesky first line
You could drop out the first word
But it did feel good

 

[Husky Alien]

That pesky first line
You could drop out the first word
But it did feel good

damn I can't watch
game and type haiku in mind
thanks for the right way

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

damn I can't watch
game and type haiku in mind
thanks for the right way

After that first line,
And, really, the second too
I do believe you

 

[Ewekon]

Got satisfaction
No sympathy for devils
Huskies howlin' wolves

 

[Chosen]

Its gameday at uconn
Adrillene is flowing
Cant wait for offense and defense
To shine

Let's go uconn
Comes from the stands
Home and away

Let's go uconn
Bring home a W

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Its gameday at uconn
Adrillene is flowing
Cant wait for offense and defense
To shine

Let's go uconn
Comes from the stands
Home and away

Let's go uconn
Bring home a W

Adrillene's sobbing:
"That wasn't haiku, and it's
not even game day!"

Haiku is rule-bound
First line is 5 syllables
Then 7, then 5

Anything other
than 5, then 7, then 5?
Keep it to yourself

As to, "It's gameday"
That was yesterday, Chosen
Maybe sleep it off?

 

[Chosen]

My friend online told me about the structure of a haiku and so here is my huskies haiku

I am a huge fan
Obsessed fan I know I am
It is all I know

If you want to become great
See you on the Wall at home
And on a banner

One play at a time
Score on that play and focus
Stop the opponent

Let's go get a win
It will be very special
In my heart and soul

 

[August_West]

Just shut up, @Dove
I said Shut the hell up @Dove
wash your satin pants