St. John's Game Day Haiku

[mussels]

There's a haiku we need in here for mojo and I'm not seeing it.

There’s a haiku we
need in here for mojo and
I’m not seeing it

But of course you did
an interesting take for sure
on anti haiku

 

[Husky Alien]

Haiku counts right, but confuses for looking like
Oxford comma fail

It's the opposite
But is hard to see that way
Clarity rewrite...

A storm is brewing:
UConn blue & white; NOT red
We better be loud

Yours is not haiku
Form. I slightly fixed it now
Without total change

Maybe now no doubt
or confusion. This should work
Thanks as always Hans

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

A downvote is close

enough. Now, I feel better

about tonight's game.

Now I understand
But this post wasn't haiku
So I corrected

There's a haiku we

need in here for mojo and

I'm not seeing it.

Ah, now I get it
But lines were still slightly off
So I corrected

 

[jayteeman]

Reds out of order
Pitino out of order
Dogs decide justice

 

[Ewekon]

Lou's ugly sweaters
Can't cover St. John's weakness
Dogs clean up Red Stain

Red storm? That's for sure
Huskies smell blood in the wind
UConn whites out storm

 

[Hans Sprungfeld]

Yours is not haiku
Form. I slightly fixed it now
Without total change

I fixed my mistake
Lots of putbacks in this thread
Thanks for taking note